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This isn't a love poem,                     and it never really was
It's telling you I was too quick
To make decisions, to think I was free
From the shackles,
from the cage of another;
and trying to explain -
The beauty of a moment
meant more to me
than you ever thought you did.


This isn't a love poem,                             but it was once
This is saying I forgave a long time ago
but I am the cliché and cannot forget.
But though some small part of me
wants murder
another still wants the past,
and maybe always will, I didn't learn
although I understand better.


this isn't a love poem,               and i don't know if it will be
it's just letting you know
                             go?
that if you ever need me
you only have to reach.

                                           again.
©2007-2009 ~conorschildchild
:iconconorschildchild:

Author's Comments

Oh conorschild, you card, this is a love poem after all!



I'm not entirely sure how much this relates to me.

I would appreciate crit on this more than ever <33

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:iconwhitesidevampire:
I cried.

That's about all I could be bothered saying when my feet hurt this much.

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ctJemm: Marry me, sparklepants.
:iconconorschild:
Watching my own article is a bit egotistical, in retrospect.

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conorschild: overusing commas since '73 seconds ago

~thingsareprettyokay

#getLIT for people who think writing is just tops
:iconconorschild:
*account.

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conorschild: overusing commas since '73 seconds ago

~thingsareprettyokay

#getLIT for people who think writing is just tops
:iconconorschild:
Damn you.

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conorschild: overusing commas since '73 seconds ago

~thingsareprettyokay

#getLIT for people who think writing is just tops
:iconveddie-edder:
The only thing I'd mention is the use of caps, maybe have lower case text, but just make it bold.

You know how I feel about this one. <3

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I LOVE NARUTO
:iconkool-kittykat:
That is ... beautiful. :happycry:

I think there could have been more though. Verses to other people tangled in the narrator's love-torn past. To him, the one who took her from me - if there had been one. To them, who laughed at me - if they had laughed at all.

And also, some of the small comments on the last verse kind of messed the layout slightly, I think. If it had just been one comment, it would have been fine, but the extra ones changed it too much.

I love the repetition of 'This isn't a love poem', though.

And I seem to be faving everything of yours, recently, you magnificent artist, you.

:+favlove:

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JOIN MAI CIRCUS GUYZE.

Everyone's doing it...
:iconwhitesidevampire:
I got my AS results this morning.

I cried.



¬¬

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ctJemm: Marry me, sparklepants.
:iconconorschild:
The layout looks fine on mine, although it was a lot of work to get it there...what resolution are you on? :noes:

This is a personal poem, about me. Truly. So, there wasn't those people. At least not affecting me right now =P I might add more if I feel I can.

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conorschild: overusing commas since '73 seconds ago

~thingsareprettyokay

#getLIT for people who think writing is just tops
:iconconorschildchild:
Yeah, arrogant cunt.

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lol, writing lol

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